I know, I know, we JUST changed the look. It’s a bit soon to be making the change, but we felt that the new look, while a pretty good improvement over the old one, just wasn’t quite popping for us. Consequently we’ve moved onward, upward, forward, and here we stand. Whaddya think?
The Elephant Shoes story has been revised rather substantially. I think the new version has improved greatly in both the language (big reduction on “and” usage) and the development of each of the characters. A fair amount of “fluff” detail (pun totally intended!) has been removed and refined as well. The total word count has been reduced by about 27.
Birth Pains is a story that intrigued me, yet I wasn’t happy with it even when I posted it. I’m still not 100% happy with it, but it does seem to flow a little more smoothly now. Thanks to those who offered constructive criticism; this one, while still not perfect, is a better story for it!