Archive for the ‘Revision History’ Category

The Elephant Shoes story has been revised rather substantially. I think the new version has improved greatly in both the language (big reduction on “and” usage) and the development of each of the characters. A fair amount of “fluff” detail (pun totally intended!) has been removed and refined as well. The total word count has been reduced by about 27.

Birth Pains is a story that intrigued me, yet I wasn’t happy with it even when I posted it. I’m still not 100% happy with it, but it does seem to flow a little more smoothly now. Thanks to those who offered constructive criticism; this one, while still not perfect, is a better story for it!

I have made some significant revisions to The Death of the Death of Death, which I believe tighten up the story (I swear, that’s a technical term) a good deal and make certain elements a little clearer. You will find the new draft in place of the old draft, and for the time being the old draft is not available. I may at some point create a category for original drafts of stories that have been revised, but it won’t be today!

Note: The story is now in its third major revision. Thanks to everyone who’s helped in the critique of this piece!